Writers Moment: Personal Review

For the most part i was pleased with my persuasive essay but I definitely thing i could have used more buzz words to set off the emotions of my reader. More enervating words may have broken down the readers outer defences and shed some light on my purpose behind the whole essay. My teacher thinks I needed more supporting detail ,but I think that a hero is more of something you might look inside yourself to find so that you could apply the meaning to someone elses external identity. External Identity being the title that you give or are given from the people around you. Ex: Teacher, Student, Boss, Employee, hero, and so on.